Aedaliegh of Arceldör · Short Stories

Writing Worlds into Being

It’s been a while since I’ve posted on this little blog I came to love. In August 2015, I made a commitment to spend 15 minutes everyday writing or doing some other form of creativity. The finished products were posted here.

When the year ended, a tiny little short story began growing into a novel, which I’ve spent the last 3 years writing and tweaking (and rewriting and retweaking). Here’s a section that is near and dear to my heart.

Aedaliegh of Arceldör Chapter 1, Part 2.

FInal Installment



“Aedaliegh Van Hoeflich, I won’t tell you again. Stop fiddling with that bow and help me wash these clothes.”

Aeda looked up at her mother sitting on the other side of the room and groaned, “Ma, can’t it wait? I’ve about figured out how to fix it.” The string of her bow had snapped off the limb the day before, and she was currently trying to mend it by the fire. The evening before she had smoothed the top of the limb with sandpaper and created a new hole. Now all she had to do was reattach the bowstring. The bow was worn. It’s edges were smooth from wear, and the leather grip was slowly coming off, but Aeda couldn’t imagine giving it up. Her father had brought it home on her fifth birthday. He had walked into the house and immediately placed it’s pale wooden frame in her lap, her grin reaching to his ears.

Her mother had gasped. When her mother had asked him to get a bow for her birthday, she had simply meant for him to buy a nice pink ribbon- perhaps one made of silk- for Aeda to wear in her hair. But her father was a hunter, and his mind had immediately slipped into a daydream of teaching his only child to hunt alongside him in the forrest. He had not even considered another meaning. Aeda’s mother had been furious, but when she saw how her daughter had clutched the bow to her chest like one might hug a doll, she had shrugged her shoulders and simply let the matter pass.

“I’m almost done, and you had promised to help me. I won’t tell you again, so you best get your little legs over here.”

Her father was in the corner leaning against the hearth, sharpening stones for arrow points. His face reflected the bright orange glow of the fire. This was Aeda’s favorite time of the day. They would sit together by the fire and smooth pale wood into shafts and rocks into arrowheads. They were set to go hunting together after the harvest was over. She looked at him, silently begging for him to intervene- to tell her mother that she was allowed to stay right here beside him, but instead he leaned towards and whisper with a wink, “Go help your mother, little deer. I’ll see if I can’t finish your bow.”

Aeda sighed dramatically, but she knew there was no pointing in fighting with either of them. She handed her bow to her Father and dragged her feet to go and sit with her mother beside the table. She sat on an old wooden stool leaning over a large tub of water. Her father chuckled as Aeda sat down on the stool with a loud crash beside her mother.

She submerged her hands in the lukewarm, milky water and picked up the first piece of cloth her hands touched. Pulling the pale grey garment in and out of the water multiple times before beginning to scrub it against the water board. Her mother washed clothes like a musician might play a song, filling the house with drum beats made of swishing water and soaked cloth. Aeda fell in line with the rhythm made by her mother’s graceful, sun kissed hands. The fire crackled softly, and her father mimicked it sounds as her struck stone against stone. She could hear their neighbor singing an old country lullaby to her baby as she rocked him to sleep. This was melody of their every day, and it was her favorite song. The whole village came together under the stars and played their own kind of instrument.

Aeda looked at her mother, hunched over the basin of water. Her brow was furloughed, signaling that she had already lost herself in another thought. Aeda didn’t look anything like her mother. She had olive brown skin where her mother’s was a deep brown. Her mother was one tall tree of sharp angles, and she was rounded and sturdy like her father. Yet, everyone told her she was her mother through and through. Their outsides may not resemble each other, but their hearts were of the same mold. Aeda watched her mother stare into the fire, and she knew what what she was thinking.

Her mother never stayed in the present world for long. She was always trying to remember old stories, or dreaming about what the future might hold. The towns people knew her mother by another name: they called her Legende.

Aeda peered up at her mother through her lashes and smiled, “Before the mountains had begun to sprout and the rivers took their shape, the earth was but dirt, a void and lifeless expanse.”

Her mother opened one of her eyes, and smiled. The rhythm of her hands changed from a choppy drum beat to a slow serenade. Her mother’s steady voice rang out and began to paint pictures into the cold air above them. “In the heavens above dwelt the gods. One day, Adamos, the god of color, came across this blank expanse and he was saddened by it’s lack of beauty. He inquired of the gods as to whom it belonged, and when he found that it had no one. He fashioned for himself thirteen helpers – both male and female- to share in the creating with him. He gave each of his thirteen helpers blank canvases and colors with which to paint. He outstretched his arms and freed them to fill the canvases with beauty and wonder and joy- whatever they could think of. Floortje…”

Aeda’s mother stopped the story and opened her eyes, “I’m afraid I’ve forgotten their names. Would you help me?”

Aeda nodded gleefully, she knew the story by heart. She sat up straight over the bucket of water and tried to remember how her mother and told it, “Floortje began to paint the rose, with bright red petals and dark greens stems. Tuur made the Oak tree with it’s wide trunk and branches that stretch from one end of the forrest to the other.” Aeda paused, trying to remember the others.

“And Steren?” Her mother added, helping her through the story.

“Oh, yes. Steren crafted the mountains and valleys and Kalb drew all the beasts and animals like the squirrel and the moose. Even the wolf was his idea, though I don’t think he planned on them having teeth that sharp. Kalweh designed the most beautiful dresses and blouses so that they all looked like gods themselves.  Oh, and then there Acker who drew tiny little seeds that grew into all kinds of vegetables and fruits. …. and then… and then….”

“Hulbrecht.” Her mother reminded her.

“Oh yes! Hulbrecht…. What did he do?

   Hulbrecht saw a great mass of water, and so he formed the sea. And Wy painted rivers that flowed out from it.”

“That’s right,” interjected Aeda.” She put her finger on her mouth and bounced it on and off her lips. “Okay, so there’s also Miena, Acker’s wife, who filled the waters with fish. And then finally Blythe, who put the small little lights in the sky.”

“Very good.” Aeda’s mothered cooed, still scrubbing a blouse with soap.

“And when each of the thirteen…”

“You’ve forgotten one,” Aeda’s father chimed in from across the room.

“No I haven’t.”

“That was only twelve.”

Aeda and her mother both did a quick count of their fingers and Aeda realized indeed her father was right. She pinched her nose and squinted one idea, trying her hardest to think of who she had forgotten.

“I’ll give you a hint.” He father teased, standing up from his place beside the fire and joining them to finish the laundry. “We put it in our supper.”

“Thyme!” Aeda shouted. “The thirteenth was Thyme and he made all the herbs and spices.”

“I’m glad we remembered that one,” Aeda’s mother smiled. “Or else our dinners would be quite bland.”

They all let out a small chuckle, and her father took hold of her mother’s hand and smoothed his thumb over her palm.

“And when each of the thirteen,” her mother continued, “completed their designs, Adamos came and whispered life into the painting, and they moved out of the canvases and began to fill the dark world. Mountains rose from the expanse, and trees sprouted out from the dirt. Beasts began to roam the fields and vegetables were planted from food. But there was one of the thirteen who did not design anything for Adamos to finish. He name was…

“Ermelinda!” Aeda exclaimed. “Ermelinda only sat and watch as all the others spent everyday painting and drawing. So, Adamos came to her, and asked her why she wasn’t painting anything. And she said to him…

Aeda’s mother stood up from her stool and with a dramatic flourish, put her hand on her husbands should and pointed out the window. “I do not paint, my King, because I can not stop thinking of the creations my friends have already made. What if Floortje painted her flowers onto a tree of Tuur’s? What if Steren caused the earth to rise over Wy’s water? What could we create together? We work as thirteen, but what could we create if we worked as one?”

Her mother let out a big sigh and sat back down on her stool, and continued.

“Adamos saw what Ermelinda did. He saw the dogwood and the waterfall, though they had yet to be named as such.”

“And then, he told all the others that they should start working together to make even more beautiful things! They could work in pairs or in groups of three, four, five, or even six!”

“And why, my little deer, did Adamos ask them to do that?” Aeda’s father asked her.”

“Because he realized that they were stronger together?”

“And what did they create?”

“Well… Tuur and Acker created the apple tree. Floortje and Kalb painted the peacock. And I think Era and Hulbrecht created rain so that Acker and Thyme’s crops didn’t always have to be planted close to the rivers.”

“Well done!” Aeda’s mother exclaimed. “You’ll have replaced me in no time.”

“I could never.” Aeda blushed. “You finish Mama. The ending is my favorite part.”

“Oh very well. Finally, Adomas created the sun, and called it to rise in the sky and disappear for half the day. He declared that when it rose, the thirteen should toil and work, but when it sank beneath the earth, they should sleep and rest until it rose once more. And so the earth was filled with beauty and wonder, and they sat by the Sea as the sun sank beneath the earth. They ate of the fruits they had created with their own hands, and drank the wine of their own imagination.  When the land was filled and their work was done, the thirteen came to Adamos and they asked what they were to do now. And Adamos told them, we shall enjoy what we have made.”

It was now Aeda’s father who stood. Assuming his most kingly stance, he spoke in a deep voice, “We shall enjoy what we have made. We shall work the ground and rule over the lands together. Each of you shall take a partner of their own, and we shall spread across the lands, each pair in charge a section. We shall watch over it with great care. We shall have children and we shall teach them to create and to rule, just as we will do.” And then he turned to Ermelinda and asked her to join him.”

Her father held out his hand to his wife and lifted her up off the stool to face him.

“Adamos offered his hand to the wise Ermelinda and  asked her to stand beside him for the rest of the eternity. That very night the two were wed, and the twelve fashioned crowns out of gold and silver and placed them on their heads.”

Her mother placed a hand on her fathers check and whispered softly, “And so the two began to rule over the lands, and the twelve spread out amongst the them. Tuur and Floortje traveled to the forest and made their home there. Steren and Kalb took the the Northwest Mountains, and settled in a cave. Holbrecht and Wy built the first ship, and lived on the sea, and traveled the rivers. Acker settled south of the sea, where the soil was rich, and Miena went with him. His brother Thyme, and his wife Kahweh, settled just east of him, at the bank of the mountains. And finally, Blythe and Era settled in the eastern valley just before the castle where Adomas and Ermelinda dwelt, watching over the lands from their castle on Jhoeksteen Mountain.

They called the realm “Arceldör” for it was pleasant place filled with beauty and ruled in goodness. And so, they began to build their homes and have children to fill them. Their children married with one another, and had children of their own, and the land of Arceldör was filled with life and beauty, and people to revel in it.”

Her mother took Aeda’s head, and drew it to her. For a moment, they stood their together hands and hearts joined together. The neighbor’s baby began to cry, and it broke the still, quiet moment.

“Little deer,” whispered her father, “its time we went to bed.  We all need rest for tomorrow. Let’s try and shut our eyes.”

Her mother picked up her crutches off the floor and maneuvered her way to standing. One of her crutches slipped beneath her weight, knocking the wash basin over and covering the dirt floor with the milky water.

Her mother groaned, beat the dirt, and then laughed. “You think after six months I’d have figured out how to use these things.”

“Go on to bed, you two.” Her Father said, helping her mother off the floor. “I’ll clean this up.”

Her mother’s newfound disability didn’t seem to bother her parents as much as it did Aeda. Tears began to roll down her face, and Aeda could bear it no longer. She ran to her bed and flung herself down on the mattress, covering herself completely with blankets as the tears continued to fall down her cheeks.  Her mother held a hand up to her father, and followed her to the bed. As gently as one might pull off a cloth that’s been covering a wound, she pulled back the blankets covering Aeda’s face.

“Mother,” Aeda choked out quietly, “Do ye really think Adamos and Ermelinda are happy with the way things are now? If they created the lands and animals to be good and beautiful, then why, “Aeda paused and sucked in a breath before letting it all spew out. “why does winter make people sick? And why do the wolves steal our livestock? Why does the land not give us enough food to make our bellies stop grumbling? Why does the King work us so hard and pay us so little?”

The magic in the story had run out, and Aeda could here the cracks forming in her mother’s voice. “So many questions my love, and all of them good ones, but let’s leave them for another night when the harvest is over. Tomorrow, we shall celebrate and dance and tell stories the whole night. And I promise to answer all the questions you can think of.”

“Tomorrow then.” Aeda sighed. And she fell asleep dreaming of what it would be like to live under a king like Adamos.

Ramblings

Inklings of my own

 

Inklings 2018 pic     It’s that day again… the day I bake scones, drink coffee with friends and celebrate two wonderful writers whose works cultivated a love for myths in me at an early age. C.S. Lewis, author of The Chronicles of Narnia, and J.R.R. Tolkien, author of The Lord of the Rings, met on this day over ninety years ago. Shortly thereafter, Tolkien sent Lewis an epic poem he had written. It was filled with lore and myth and the fantastical realm, passions they both shared. Lewis returned the poem several days later with notes, critiques and even suggestions for how Tolkien could make his lines flow better. Can you imagine actually critiquing Tolkien? It sounds almost absurd. But Lewis did, as well as passing along one of his own poems. And so began a small community revolving around this idea of sharing and critiquing one another’s works. You might know them as the Inklings.

But today, instead of talking about the original Inklings, and their vast influence on each other and the countless books birthed through their gatherings, I want to tell you about my own set of Inklings.

In 2016, I moved to Berlin for a 9-month internship. (Yes. Yes. Two years later I’m still here, but that’s another story.) About three months in, I realized the short story that I had been playing around with wasn’t a short story. Much to my great displeasure, it was a novel. I was a little baby writer who had written a mere handful of things. This craft was new to me, and I had no idea what I was doing. To be cliché, I found myself in front of a mountain with no map, no supplies, and no training whatsoever.

By grace, I had moved to a city that embraces artists and I found a writing class targeted toward people who were just starting to write their novels and needed guidance. Oddly specific right? Kate, my teacher was brilliant, wise, experienced and kind. (*Insert shameless plug for the Reader Berlin and Kate who is AMAZING).

We spent the first four weeks learning the basics of novel writing, and the last four weeks reading a chapter of each other’s work and critiquing the pieces in class. Once again, I had no idea what I was doing. My typical response to art had always been “I really liked it” or “this is so beautiful.” And that wasn’t good enough here. It was fine to say those two phrases, but it needed to be followed by a “because…” or a “but…”

I also learned it was okay not to say those two phrases. That is was perfectly fine to look at a writer and politely say, “you know, this wasn’t really my thing. However, I did appreciate when you…” For a half-southern girl raised in the land of buttered words and sugared expressions, being open and honest when I didn’t like something felt like I was slapping someone in the face and kicking them in the stomach once they fell in the dirt.    But then it was my turn to have my piece critiqued, and I realized that critique isn’t a slap in the face at all, but a friend telling me to pick up the pen and try again. Critique can be a loving teacher pointing out what I need to work on and how I could improve. Every single person at that table took time to read my work, think about how it could improve, and share their thoughts with me. They didn’t do this to be cruel, they did this so that one day my dream of seeing Aedaliegh of Arceldör in a bookstore might become reality.

When the course ended, a few of us would meet at coffee shops throughout the city to sit quietly at a table and write together. The next course came and we signed up again, seeking more feedback and more knowledge of writing as a craft. When Kate offered her next course, an entire 10 weeks solely spent reading and critiquing each other’s work, I immediately signed up. This, I was learning, was how I really get my novel to go somewhere. Yes, it was helpful to learn about different styles of narration, using third person verse first person, and so much more. But I found that the critique is what spurred my book to be better. Not just when my own piece was critiqued, but also in the critiquing of others I learned what worked and what didn’t,  to spot a mistake, and even to anticipate what some of the feedback might be and make it better as I was writing the first draft.

Somewhere at the end of the third course, Kate hinted that some of us might be able to do this critique thing on our own. As we walked back to the subway that night, a few of us asked, “Could we really do this? Start our own group? Do we even want to?”

That August, five of us met in a living room and began this process on our own. We didn’t know how long it would last, but we wanted to see where it would go. It’s been hard. We’re all incredibly busy. Some of us have families. Some of us have had to leave the country for three months. I started a new job that makes me get up at 4:30 am on Tuesdays even though writing group last until 10 or 11 pm on Monday nights. We have had to make sacrificed to be in this group. We’re tired. We have little time. But all of us have made our books and this group a priority because we know it is one of the keys to our success.

A few weeks ago, I shared a scene I’d been hiding from this group for nearly two years. I was so nervous they would read this scene, throw the paper across the room and say something like, “What in the world, Bekah! You must be absolutely insane to write something like this.” But after two years with the group, I finally decided I trust them enough to share it. They loved it, which is still the most shocking thing that’s happened. They absolutely loved it and made me promise not to take it out. Then came the “but..” at the end of the chapter with a really sweet and lovely little moment I had written between Aeda and Fryderik. And my girl, Laura, looked at me, and said, “I was shocked because Aeda would never do this. It’s not her at all.”

She was right. It took me a minute to see what she was saying, but it hit me. Aeda would never do what I had her doing at the end of this scene. It went against everything she was. That night, Aeda got a wardrobe change, and all because Laura, over the past two years, has gotten to know my character almost as good as I have. I’ve said it for the last two years and I’ll say it again now…

The secret to creativity is to surround ourselves with a community. We were not made to work in solitude, but to share, to borrow, and to build upon each other.

When I tell people about this group, and what we do, they always say, “Oh, I must be hard to critique someone’s work. I could never do that.” And while that used to be my same opinion, I reply, “It’s not so hard after a while. I love their work, and I want to see them succeed.” And it’s true. I want to buy their books one day. I want them to buy mine. And in order for that to happen, you need more than one set of eyes.

The secret to the Inklings success was each other. C.S. Lewis may have never gotten some of his works published had it not been for Tolkien’s connections and recommendations (not to mention that his Space Trilogy actually started out as a dare from Tolkien.) Tolkien may have never gotten his head out of languages and anthologies long enough to write a plot had it not been for Lewis urging him to write the next chapter so that he could see what happens in the story.

If I ever get Aeda published, it will be because of these women. They have kept me writing when I was tired and wanted to forget Aeda altogether. They have given me ideas when I had no idea where to go. They have given me encouragement and critique. They have helped me see things I never did, and have made turned this lonely task of writing into a story of how I found my people.

I passionately believe that every Artist needs their Inklings. I will never stop proclaiming this. If you’re a lonely artist, you don’t have to be. Join a group. Create a group. Less than two years ago, these five women were strangers from five different parts of the world with three different mother tongues. And yet, two years later, here we are because we showed up, we spent time thinking through each other’s work, and we were honest with one another.

I believe that our success as artists directly correlates to the community around us. Today, I celebrate the five women who sit in a living room with me once a month and make Aeda more lovely, more true, and more captivating than she could ever be with just me.

If you don’t have your Inklings, find them. It will take time, but find them and let them revolutionize your work. They will, I promise.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Aedaliegh of Arceldör · Short Stories · Songs · Spoken Word

Stomp ( A Folk Song)

Okay,y’all. I need your help. Below you will find an excerpt from the (children’s) novel I’m working on. It’s a scene I’ve been playing with for a while, and simply can’t figure out how to make the *stomp* part work in print. So, I would love and appreciate your input and ideas on how to best convey what I see and hear in my head. This is group effort, so y’all chime in.

bonfire-painting
Nikolai Astrup’s Midsummer Eve Bonfire, 1912.

 

Tonight, it was the Gehimni people who were given the honor of entertaining. More than twenty Gehimni men and women ran around the fire, hollering and making noise. It snowed in the Gehimnis for nine months out of the year, and so most of the bed had long beards that covered the majority of their face, and the women wore long skirts made of animal skin with all kinds of braids strung about in their hair. Suddenly, the Gehimini performers stopped running around the fire, and the women took their spots in a circle on the ground. A man began to strum a mandolin, as the others began to stomp their feet to his rhythm. The men threw their knees high up in the air only to bring their smashing back down with the force of a ten horses. Each of the Gehmini men fell in sync with one another until one man threw his head back and howled at the top of his lungs, Ooooooooooooohhhh, and the other men followed his lead.

I’ve seen the mountain tops and I’ve gaped at the sea,

but never has this wanderer beheld a beauty such as thee.

I’d scale the mountains tops and sail across the sea,

if you’d be waiting for me with a white dress and a ring.

 

Yer nose is as pointy as the snowy peaks,

and yer eyes are more emerald than the evergreen.

I know I ain’t much to look at, my darling sweet,

but I got heart a gold somewhere underneath.

 

My heart when it saw you went *stomp stomp stomp*

And my lips started singing this horrid song.

But my dear please know that if you love me so,

I’ll sing this song to you until we’re grey and old.

 

I’ve got a house here in these woods, I bet yer Papa would be proud.

‘Gotta fireplace and a porch that goes all around,

but I’m stilling miss something, perhaps a spritely frau.

So what do ye say, will ye marry me now?

 

The women sitting on the edge of the crowd jumped up and joined arms with the men, and together they danced a polka around the fire. They weren’t the best of singers, but that didn’t stop every single man and woman from singing, or rather yelling, at the top of his or her lungs. If only they would sing on key, they’d be quite good. The entire camp was mesmerized by them, and they joined in with the stomping and clapping with just as much vigor as if they had known the songs their entire lives.

 

Darlin’ let me dance with you until this night ends.

Yes, come a little closer. I don’t mind those hairs on yer chin.

Yer back is strong from plowing and I sure do love yer apple pie.

Oh, you’re the only woman who could ever catch my eye.

 

My heart when it saw you went  *stomp stomp stomp*

And my lips started singing this horrid song

But my dear please know that if you love me so

I’ll sing this song to you until we’re grey and old.

Yes, I’ll sing this song to you until we’re grey and old.


Also, would English speaking children know what a “frau” is? Can I use that word in a “fantasy” novel?  Thoughts? Comments? Suggestions?